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Date Posted: 20:21:48 04/15/01 Sun
Author: Flying Colors
Subject: Re: living art...
In reply to: bluegem 's message, "living art..." on 21:13:15 04/11/01 Wed

I was lost in the peace and serenity... dust in the sun's rays, tick-tock of the hall clock... following her through the early morning as she heads back to her work... the self-portrait

the last couple lines threw me off, though... I didn't see the connection between getting out of bed-bathing-sitting on the stool (wet)... and the students. Like the last two lines were just added on for and "extra touch". I thoroughly enjoyed the piece... up til that point.

It's beautiful like it is... I see no need to "spruce it up"...

(personal preference: end it with "last ray of light from the morning windows.")

** smilin' **

Nice to see ya here again, bluegem.

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