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Date Posted: 13:49:46 06/27/09 Sat
Author: Esther
Subject: I hate when that happens! >>>
In reply to: Larn 's message, "Stupid internet ate my first response" on 15:42:57 06/23/09 Tue

>...and it was a good one. It even had metaphors.
>Damn.

LOL
>
>Anyway, I'm a little lost on where exactly the man is
>located. Are these two bits meant to follow each
>other or is there plot between them? I kind of like
>the mystery of where he is, how she got there, how
>they know each other, but I'm left with an unclear
>sense of what's going on. We don't need explicit
>details, we just need our rudder pointed the right way
>so we can row there on our own. (Or at least I think
>that's the metaphor I was looking for.)

Ah yes, the concept that I need to leave bigger plot crumbs along the way so I don't let the reader get lost. This seems to escape me. So I guess your metaphor is bang on. *G* I have a terrible problem with this, and I'm hoping to find a way to fix it and still be subtle. At any rate, yup, his scene follows directly after hers and his location, the time he's in, how she got there and how they know each other are a mystery at this point. And so I think you're pointed in the right direction, I just need to hand you bigger oars to row with so you don't cascade off the falls.
>
>Oh, and the raptor sculpture, I'm guessing it's a
>bird, but I thought dinosaur and didn't make the
>connection till you said something about wings.

Well, that'll teach me for not calling that dang bird of prey what it is, but you know something funny? I edited it out cause I was thinking it would give something away. So you see how deeply inbedded this problem of mine is? *G*
>
>You work very well in dream-like stories. I'm looking
>forward to more!

Thanks Larn! I'm just tickled that it came across as dream-like! I can work within the boundaries that dream-like inspires! Awesome!

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! Much appreciated!

Now when can I read some more of yours?

Hugs

Esther

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>>...and it was a good one. It even had metaphors. >>Damn. > >LOL >> >>Anyway, I'm a little lost on where exactly the man is >>located. Are these two bits meant to follow each >>other or is there plot between them? I kind of like >>the mystery of where he is, how she got there, how >>they know each other, but I'm left with an unclear >>sense of what's going on. We don't need explicit >>details, we just need our rudder pointed the right way >>so we can row there on our own. (Or at least I think >>that's the metaphor I was looking for.) > >Ah yes, the concept that I need to leave bigger >plot crumbs along the way so I don't let the reader >get lost. This seems to escape me. So I guess your >metaphor is bang on. *G* I have a terrible problem >with this, and I'm hoping to find a way to fix it and >still be subtle. At any rate, yup, his scene follows >directly after hers and his location, the time he's >in, how she got there and how they know each other are >a mystery at this point. And so I think you're >pointed in the right direction, I just need to hand >you bigger oars to row with so you don't cascade off >the falls. >> >>Oh, and the raptor sculpture, I'm guessing it's a >>bird, but I thought dinosaur and didn't make the >>connection till you said something about wings. > >Well, that'll teach me for not calling that dang >bird of prey what it is, but you know something funny? > I edited it out cause I was thinking it would give >something away. So you see how deeply inbedded this >problem of mine is? *G* >> >>You work very well in dream-like stories. I'm looking >>forward to more! > >Thanks Larn! I'm just tickled that it came across >as dream-like! I can work within the boundaries that >dream-like inspires! Awesome! > >Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! Much >appreciated! > >Now when can I read some more of yours? > >Hugs > >Esther
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