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Date Posted: 16:46:04 07/03/09 Fri
Author: Debi
Subject: I feel his need of her.
In reply to: Esther 's message, " And the last one, promise. An excerpt is this way >>> " on 15:42:36 06/30/09 Tue

You can write some serious expression. It's very emotional.

Both his scene with his wife's (?) killer and the later scene with the other woman, I can feel the depth of his emotions. He's secure in his own abilities and quite capable, both in his desire to rend the killer and his talk about the beauty and peril of nature. He's complex; does he ever doubt himself? Confidence is a good thing, but is he ever vulnerable to her, have need of her help? I know, I haven't read the whole thing.

>He would sleep, for in dreams, he could be with her
>again.

Who among us hasn't hoped to cling to a dream for what was contained within?

Nice work, Esther. I look forward to more!

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[> [> [> That’s cool! >>> -- Esther, 14:29:47 07/06/09 Mon

You can write some serious expression. It's very emotional.

Thank you!

Both his scene with his wife's (?) killer and the later scene with the other woman, I can feel the depth of his emotions. He's secure in his own abilities and quite capable, both in his desire to rend the killer and his talk about the beauty and peril of nature. He's complex; does he ever doubt himself? Confidence is a good thing, but is he ever vulnerable to her, have need of her help? I know, I haven't read the whole thing.

I just love this! I’m glad he comes across as capable. And complex! Woohoo! *G* Now does he ever doubt himself? How’s this?

Excerpt from working title ‘Pander’
by Esther Sawatzky © 2002 All rights reserved.
Posted for critiquing purposes only and does not constitute publication.

He rubbed his hands together, hoping to prevent frostbite, but all the while his attention was more on the woman. What was she in the saloon? It was by far, the vilest place he had ever been in. Where did she come from? Why was she here now? He wondered if he would ever have answers to those plaguing questions or if she would wake up in time to realize his actions would most likely end up freezing them both to death.

Gareth knelt down beside her. She was trembling. He stripped his outerwear and with only the briefest hesitation stripped that as well before he crawled into the blanket beside her, wrapping his arms around her. He cuddled her to his body and was thankful to notice with their bodies pressed together in soothing warmth her shivering subsided.

He fought against the desire to go to sleep. He was so tired and he wanted to join the woman in his dreams, where he knew she would be, as she had resided there for as long as he could remember. It would be so easy to welcome the icy embrace of the storm and simply let go. He wanted to accept the numbing effects of the cold and not feel any more pain, physically or mentally. He wanted to know the woman he held in his arms could never be hurt again. He wanted to protect her. He wanted the luxury of eternity with her. In death, nothing could keep them apart.

Raised to be a warrior, Gareth did not fear dying, he feared dying without her; he did not want to spend his afterlife as he had his physical one. Alone. In life, he was misunderstood and despised. If he listened to the wind, and accepted this as the end, she wouldn’t witness the hatred. Hatred she would experience because of his actions and what he was. Hatred she would have for him. By saving her from Trystan, he had damned her to the same solitary existence as his. By preventing the rape, he had damned her to the condemnation of the people who didn’t prevent, or stop, the abuse.

She sighed in her sleep, squirming to get closer to him, an erotic movement that damned her yet again.

Aroused, he accepted another truth. Despite everything, he was a man, and his body wanted hers with a desperation that threatened to overwhelm him. He could feel her softness, her backside pressed intimately against him, her breast in his hand. He shifted and couldn’t help but notice how her movements matched his, how she was the perfect fit for his large frame. In this position he could envision himself pressing against her, into her, taking her, ravishing her until she begged him for release. Gareth had dreamt of her for so long, he could see her eyes darken with passion and hear her moans as she took him into her body and they soared above life itself.

It was these thoughts that kept him awake and burning hot, during the long, cold, stormy night. These desires that forced his mind from death, and towards living. For now he had to be content with his dreams, of the newfound feelings of contentment and belonging. To savour the knowledge that he was free to cherish her, and care for her. Until she was ready, he had no intention of forcing himself on her. Until she was ready, he would wait for his answers. Understanding they held unmitigated sway over their fate, he didn’t want to hear them at all.

>He would sleep, for in dreams, he could be with her
>again.

Who among us hasn't hoped to cling to a dream for what was contained within?

I think I’m guilty of that myself. *G*

Nice work, Esther. I look forward to more!

Thanks Debi! More will be on the way soon!

Hugs

Esther

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[> [> [> [> Oh yeah, I like it! -- Debi, 06:48:05 07/07/09 Tue

Very cool! And as much as he wants to know about her and all the answers, he's willing to forgo them if it means they can be together longer.
They are a pair, aren't they? ;-)

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>You can write some serious expression. It's very >emotional. > >Both his scene with his wife's (?) killer and the >later scene with the other woman, I can feel the depth >of his emotions. He's secure in his own abilities and >quite capable, both in his desire to rend the killer >and his talk about the beauty and peril of nature. >He's complex; does he ever doubt himself? Confidence >is a good thing, but is he ever vulnerable to her, >have need of her help? I know, I haven't read the >whole thing. > >>He would sleep, for in dreams, he could be with her >>again. > >Who among us hasn't hoped to cling to a dream for what >was contained within? > >Nice work, Esther. I look forward to more!
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