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Date Posted: 21:18:26 07/03/09 Fri
Author: Page
Subject: Here's the main question I have >>>>
In reply to: Esther 's message, " And the last one, promise. An excerpt is this way >>> " on 15:42:36 06/30/09 Tue

How did she get there? *G* I guess I'm confused as to the place. Is it a place on the physical plane, or a place where their spirits meet?

He's much more clear to me now, though. He "knew" she would need him, and he prepared himself by going to this place. And he saved her life by cutting his wrists, but not deep enough to kill. At least, that's what I get when reading this. Oh, and I also liked how he pointed out that peace wasn't to be found in that place (by killing herself) by pointing out the negative aspects of everything she seemed to want.

The bits you've posted are so intriguing, and I really want to see more of this story, much as I love Fallon. *G*

Hugs,
Page

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[> [> [> Have I ever mentioned how much I love questions???? >>> -- Esther, 14:48:06 07/06/09 Mon

How did she get there? *G* I guess I'm confused as to the place. Is it a place on the physical plane, or a place where their spirits meet?

Ah. Now that is the question isn’t it. *G* At this point it could be either/or or it could be both, like a combination that mixes the best of both worlds. Yeah, I like that. Because his world is real, but she doesn’t belong there. And when she leaves to go back to hers she fades from his sight.

He's much more clear to me now, though. He "knew" she would need him, and he prepared himself by going to this place. And he saved her life by cutting his wrists, but not deep enough to kill. At least, that's what I get when reading this. Oh, and I also liked how he pointed out that peace wasn't to be found in that place (by killing herself) by pointing out the negative aspects of everything she seemed to want.

Good to know! Thanks! I’m on the right track.

As for the peace, I’m glad it came out that way. Later on, Gareth is more candid as to why he doesn’t like the place and why there will never be peace for them there.

The bits you've posted are so intriguing, and I really want to see more of this story, much as I love Fallon. *G*

LOL Thanks Page. And Fallon misses you too and doesn't want you to forget him. So...he asked if I’d mind sharing this little bit with you. How could I refuse? *G*



Excerpt from working title ‘Mirrors’
by E.M. Sawatzky © 2009 All rights reserved.
Posted for critiquing purposes only and does not constitute publication.


Oh I believe our laws state otherwise.

Cadmus whirled around. “How’d you…?”

Fallon. Excited, thrilled, and proud, I felt him move inside me again. He was a being I couldn’t resist.

He was still a fair distance away, just appearing from around the corner. A slow, deliberate pace brought him closer, and closer still, his gait emphasizing the power behind every stride. As much as I loved to watch his body, I wished him before me. I closed my eyes, and I could smell his magic, his power, his absolute maleness and need to satisfy.

“How’d I what, Cadmus? Find you?” Within touching distance, Fallon motioned me away from Cadmus with a quick tilt of his head. “It wasn’t hard. I’ve been here before.”

“Impossible. No one knows of this place.”

Fallon swept his arm out, turning in a slow circle. Images revealed themselves in detail, overlapping each other in holograms of testimony. “Who do you think performed the acts you inflicted on the unwary when you were to squeamish to perform them yourself?”

Cadmus shook his head in denial. “No.”

“Oh yes.” Fallon smiled, a cold calculating twist of his lips. The images disappeared as if they never existed. His gaze tracked to mine, demanding I stand beside him. “She’s mine. Mine to protect. Mine to choose. Mine to do with AS. I. WILL. Leave off.”

Cadmus grabbed my arm, preventing me from the inevitable. “We are to cater to her desires, Fallon. Her Fantasies. We are to take her where she needs to be.” He stepped in front of me, blocking my sight, but not my need. “More to the point. I’ve claimed her. She’s my mate.”

A growl rumbled from Fallon’s throat, a direct response to my dismay rather than Cadmus’s words. “I think not.”

Cadmus laughed. “It’s unfortunate, for you, that only one stronger than I could break our union. You do not have the power to do more than serve.”

“You dare abuse the laws that protect her?”

“Ours is a vicious world Fallon. Surely you understand that. It’s not the meek that will inherit.”

“You want to play with me and find out?”

“You can’t win.”

“Let me make this clear so you will understand. You are temptation. You have to create a deception to make yourself seem powerful and capable of performing. I know you can’t. You use the enticement of pleasure to lure your victims to slaughter. You are a lie.”

I swallowed the lump in my throat. And what are you Fallon?

Fallon’s smile gentled and he turned his focus to me as if Cadmus wasn’t there. “Honey, I am lust. I’m the craving that is always there. Always ready. Always willing to serve.” He turned is attention back to Cadmus. His voice took on a dangerous edge. “And always stronger.”

It was Cadmus’s turn to smile. “I am a Sentinel. You are nothing.”

“Nothing? Oh I think not.” Fallon raised his arms; a wind swept through. I felt the warm caress of phantom hands protecting me.

Cadmus wasn’t as fortunate, restrained with his back to the rock ledge, unable to move, he was livid. “You bastard. You are nothing but a scourge I should have disposed of when I flogged you for disobedience. Release me at once.”

“I think not.”

“Afraid Fallon? Are you terrified of what I will do to you when I’m free?”

“You know what your trouble is Cadmus? You hide behind your position. You think being a Sentinel makes you all-powerful.”

“I am powerful.”

“Then break your servant’s hold.”

Cadmus struggled against his invisible bonds. Sweat beaded on his forehead, his breath came in panting gasps. His body was exhausted from exertion, from the attempt to free himself from Fallon’s grip. Drained, he slumped forward.

Able to move about without restraint, I walked toward Fallon and placed my hand on his forearm. “He’s had enough.”

Bonds broke; Cadmus fell in a heap to the ground.

Fallon wrapped an arm around my shoulder, and together we approached Cadmus, standing before him, waiting for him to recuperate.

“When the Senate of Peers judges you, Fallon, you will pay for your insubordination and lies.” Cadmus rose to his feet, all grace gone. “Like always.”

“There will be no judgment.”

“You possess greater magic than anyone expects or believes, but that deceit will not prevent what you have coming. You have so far only had a small sampling of our punishments for the lawless.”

“A Sentinel represents the power of the one he serves. Whom do you serve Cadmus?”

Cadmus’s eyes widened; his tone spoke of his shock and disbelief. “I serve the Master.” His eyes narrowed in accusation. “Surely you don’t impl—”

“You Cadmus, have been stripped of your power. Your magic is no more.”

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[> [> [> [> Yesss! *pumps fist in air* Fallon triumphs! It's very nice to see Cadmus get what's coming to him, because I worried about that. Yes, worried, like it was something happening to people I know. Great characters, great story, great exceprt!! -- Page, 19:25:00 07/06/09 Mon


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