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Date Posted: 12:04:56 04/10/10 Sat
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Subject: Hi, Fi! >>>
In reply to: Fi 's message, "In here>>>" on 09:41:43 04/08/10 Thu

I thought this was super! (The cat was great! *G*) I especially liked the juxtaposition of Richard's little-boy thinking about whether or not a fish would swallow his spit with his trying to convince his mum he's a man. You did an excellent job of setting the scene with great visuals and dialogue.

I can't wait to read more!

Hugs,
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debikm, 16:20:10 04/10/10 Sat

You've captured the pride and desperation of a poor family, and Richard's understandable confusion. Despite his mother's desire to keep him safe, he's frustrated because she won't let him contribute to the household the only way he knows. The cat was a great touch.(I have one that sits up like a dog and waves to beg.)Gave the scene a little humor and still helped illustrate how little they have to spare.

Excellent!

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