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Date Posted: 11:34:16 03/25/10 Thu
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Subject: The hook! The hook!

That bloody hook, the thing that draws in the reader. Authoress Anonymous has 90 of them posted right now, with another huge batch coming this afternoon. If you'd like to see what readers think does and doesn't work, there are plenty of examples here:

misssnarksfirstvictim [AT] B-L-O-G-S-P-O-T [DOT] com

(Of course you'll need to change the AT and DOT to the proper symbols, and take out the dashes in the "B" word. Voy still thinks it's spam.)

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[> Here's a link click So, is your steaming Brit one of the entries? I did one but it was hard to whittle it into a 25 that worked. Not really my true first sent. But still, a good test. --

susiej, 19:21:31 03/25/10 Thu

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[> [> Yea! A link! Thanks, Susie. Voy won't let me type the B word. Yes, Carey On is in there. 17 comments, 16 positive. I liked the one you submitted!! Unfortunately, another friend is getting slammed with hers, and bad. I don't know what to say to her. -- Page, 21:25:35 03/25/10 Thu

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[> [> [> Rock on, Page! Great first line. Really. And I'm excited because even with my abbreviated first, I got what I wanted. Several said right away they identified/sympathized with Rose- so I think I finally overcame my distant POV. Woot. --

susiej, 22:32:51 03/25/10 Thu

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[> [> [> As to your friend, just remind her that if first sentences were easy there wouldn't be 175 people wanting help on theirs. It doesn't mean the story itsef if bad. -- susiej, 15:42:16 03/26/10 Fri

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>That bloody hook, the thing that draws in the reader. >Authoress Anonymous has 90 of them posted right now, >with another huge batch coming this afternoon. If >you'd like to see what readers think does and doesn't >work, there are plenty of examples here: > >misssnarksfirstvictim [AT] B-L-O-G-S-P-O-T [DOT] com > >(Of course you'll need to change the AT and DOT to the >proper symbols, and take out the dashes in the "B" >word. Voy still thinks it's spam.)
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