Been a while since I've posted text....This is a piece I had to do for a topical battle...NaKIXeM PROUDLY INTRODUCES TO YOU...-=STEP-FATHER=-...I recommend reading this outloud...some cool multis in here...I haven't keyed much so I'm practicin before I record more shit...**ALL CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM AND FEEDBACK IS GREATLY APPRECIATED** -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 21:46:38 01/09/03 Thu
Author: «‡†¤N.a.K.I.X.e.M.¤†‡» aka Šamien Christ of ABz€nT MiNd€Š Ink.of Ų.M.N.I.
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Subject: Been a while since I've posted text....This is a piece I had to do for a topical battle...NaKIXeM PROUDLY INTRODUCES TO YOU...-=STEP-FATHER=-...I recommend reading this outloud...some cool multis in here...I haven't keyed much so I'm practicin before I record more shit...**ALL CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM AND FEEDBACK IS GREATLY APPRECIATED**

Consoled by sky's arms as my soul descended,
Controlled and destined...to find a home to rest in,
Handed to two weeping spirits, Father and Mother,
I ponder and wonder...if their care would be harbored or smothered,
Corressed by Mother's hands, her own sight was safety,
I survive and taste dreams...that HE might embrace me,
Abondoned, by the mere donator of my life's other half,
My Mother lacked strength so she walked under paths,
Slumber unlocked golden gates of escape and bliss,
She complained and missed relationships and flavoured lips,
Changed her drift, to replace a kiss only one could give,
Souly from a pit, a man arose holding love and gifts,
He appreciated her virtueous presence and heart,
Heaven sent guards aid the journey these descendants embark,
Every triat Mother treasured, he had to charish,
Seen passed the fair ledge and freed paths for marriage,
Diamond rings slide over fingers to unite the bond,
Fueds died and spawned stronger love simpler than right and wrong,
Placing her life on his palms, with her respect and trust,
What's left is dust, realizing this is no man she'll regret to love,
She said, "Father, there's been no other that's corressed softer..."
I've gathered her security, and handed it to my Step Father....

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«‡†¤-TH€ ULTIMAT€ GŲD OF ALL €XZIZTIN GŲDS-¤†‡»
MASTERED THE ART OF DESTRUCTION---THE ORIGINATOR
------«‡†¤MC ŠiZaSt€RiZ N.a.K.I.X.e.M.©¤†‡»------
------«‡†¤TH€ Š.A.R.K. LUMIN€SC€NC€¤†‡»------
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OF Abzent Minded Ink. of O.M.N.I.

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VERY DOPE....some really thought out words in here, nicely written and put together nicely, only bad thing, was too many misspelled words, a writer of ur caliber should be so passed this,...just spell check ur work in msword, before finally saying its done, peace...nice work (NT) -- S.T.G.E. © aka "DAVID DUNN aka ILLER THAN THOU" of O.M.N.I.², 21:54:00 01/09/03 Thu
spelling was bad...everything else was dope as hell...loved the closer although you could see it building up, nice imagery, word usage, too bad i hate text, can't wait til we get an audio collaboration going...nice work... (NT) -- XitiZeN, 23:44:37 01/09/03 Thu
very nice work... word usage was on par, and the imagery was fairly decent.. good work.. peace (NT) -- Morbid Armor, 01:17:34 01/10/03 Fri
Wow...very well written...it holds its own for a text piece...i'm very impressed mayne... nice work Diz...pz... (NT) -- INTRO abzent, 01:28:55 01/10/03 Fri
This was a pretty nice piece man. The visualiztion was hot. Keep doin what you do (NT) -- Brail, 10:48:35 01/10/03 Fri
yeah agree mad imagery (NT) -- treyz-wan fka novice, 12:15:54 01/10/03 Fri
Damn this was REALLY nice.. Flowed perfect to that gamblers beat i was listening to along with it...Liked the emotion put into it, its one of my fave things about your topicals..dope shit, much props.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:52:24 01/10/03 Fri
I like the way you put your pieces together, very nice here man, keep spitting. (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:56:55 01/11/03 Sat

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