early morning keystyle... think that my keys are better then my writtens when I post them up... just peep and criticize -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 13:24:49 03/07/03 Fri
Author: the Dark spiTTER
Author Host/IP: kala2.k12.hi.us / 165.248.247.132
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early morning keystyle... think that my keys are better then my writtens when I post them up... just peep and criticize

out of place formations/
my abstacts rude with no patience/
it'll be like goin to war with suddam and determine on how much "ARMOR-I-GEDDEN" (ARMERGEDDEN)/
pollutted waves of oxygen takin in to the iron lung forshadows early death is what I'm bettin/
with a mind equipped with a infinite amount of megabytes on a microsize pentium chip to destroy the modern sooo called "INTELLIGENCE"/
I shoot rays from diagonal directions from a fourth eye optical burried withen the perephery of the skull killing bafoons erelevent/
life dosent measure up to who's being "HAUNTED" and which "ROBERTS" have which "DE-NE-RO"/
the hero's the one with the heart and shares lifetime memories and conscience love... thats my hero/
every dark entity has a bright inner being deep inside deilish entrials sooo he or she think as there selves as zero/
the dark spitter out with a new way and new format to his collection/
emcees use the sense givin by god and observe on whats mentioned/
tention and grasps of that other voice inside calling is a result of the dark side and it's diabolical attactions and the wreckon/
section of the cities societys crumble upon each other in piles of didgusting dis-organization/
nations try bringing it back in its place but it's too late... time for nastradamus to take over and diminish the globes beings/

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well...uhh...rhyme scheme was awful....I mean...don't try crammin so much shit in one line...split it up and get vivid with every line...instead of havin to cram one thought into ONE line....Armor I Gedden?..uhh...I dunno bout that man....keep writin and FREESTYLE....a rhythm should stick to your head when you wanna key so the rhyme structure will be a lot better....just...elevate man...don't try too hard.....peace (NT) -- N.a.K.I.X.e.M. aka DamienCHRIST of The Lounge of Lyricism, 13:42:00 03/07/03 Fri
what ever man.... (NT) -- the dark spitter, 17:05:42 03/07/03 Fri
hmm...flow seemed real choppy in here to me...some of this did seem forced..and the Armor-I-Gedden?!...that was lame....but ya had some nice lines in here too.....but definitely seen better from ya kidd...peace (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 17:13:02 03/07/03 Fri
your keystyle sucks like your freestyles if you believe me your in denile (NT) -- dlaster, 17:50:14 03/07/03 Fri
umm I thought this was ok, I was feeling some of the lines (NT) -- mad hermit, 21:05:28 03/07/03 Fri

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