ANOTHER BATTLE....im winning this one 1-0 right now...tried to post it but i guess it aint go through peep and critique and let me know what i can do better -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 22:49:00 03/13/03 Thu
Author: Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I.
Author Host/IP: cache-dh03.proxy.aol.com / 205.188.208.167
Subject: ANOTHER BATTLE....im winning this one 1-0 right now...tried to post it but i guess it aint go through peep and critique and let me know what i can do better

Blackcloud

After I finish this verse one click will hold you down like staples,
I'm a natural born sattelite making signals and you're basic like cable/
I'm unbelievable but you're not believed like ancient fables,
I have blaze in my trails but you can't go faster than sap on maples/
I don't think that you wanna wrestle with me or you'll get abrasive wounds,
One thought from my brain sustains in ya head from May to June/
Serving you word gourmet and dishing out this like I cater food,
You can't get the locals to move to you even if you used their native tunes/
I'm quicker and you'll never get enough liquor to be a drunken master,
The only way you'll ever get a punch in is if you're jumping Casper/
For every battling rapper like you, there is nothing wacker,
I gonna put the Old and Dirty in you cuz you already a bastard/
You and these other jealous cats act like I had to owe them,
I'm a tsunami on you origami watch how the flows fold them/
I'm like Yoda with the force son when you hit the air you'll die like sodas,
I'll admit that we both got dicks but you missing balls in your scrotum

Vision...Thrice Optics

ayo BLACKCLOUD couldnt spit acid rain if i pissed in his throat
but on second thought, you might like that, so disregard this qoute
you a rough sketch i erase you like Micheal Jacksons skin pigment
you a bit timid i swing towards ya stomach and leave ya back imprinted
with fists swift enough to omit ya ribs tendons leave ya shit smitten
my fisticuffs fuse fists to guts and leave ya abs gutted
i dont need to even write anymore i can beat you wit the tab button
and add reply, i run circles around ya head like white sox headbands
the wrath of Thrice, type bully, kick ya arms while you do handstands
the stance is nice, three times the value of the crap you write
because applauds for you are like porn stars when you grab the mic
i'll pick you up and hurl you at the blade and stab the knife
im past this life i ran over your spine with the back of my bike
blah blah blah...blah blah, blah, blah blah blah blah blah, etc
im clevera you never a emcee the level of my caliber

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...I think this verse had more metaphors than the previous one....or maybe they jus stood out more...I dunno....the flow is obviously there...just needs to be heard.... this was tight man.....that blah blah blah blah blah blah blah line WAS SO FUCKING DOPE....lol.....keep doin your thing man.....like I said....keep rippin.....p'Z (NT)
-- ��N.a.K.I.X.e.M.�� aka �amien Christ, 23:58:21 03/13/03 Thu
oh yeah.....you get the vote....peace (NT) -- El Mexicano..., 00:17:26 03/14/03 Fri
looks like you changed your style a bit, i likes i likes, you a rough sketch i erase you like Micheal Jacksons skin pigment......i liked that man...nice shit, seems like you've elevated yo, good to see you still at it, you ate this cat man, and yea i agree with Mr. NaKIXem, the flow was there man, good battle, vote=Viz (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 00:09:46 03/14/03 Fri
very nice ish....man..ur more of a graphic battler which is cool...the back imprints and kick ur arms while u do a handstand was tight....keep battling....ull get better at it...peace (NT) -- S.T.G.E. � aka "DAVID DUNN aka ILLER THAN THOU" of O.M.N.I.�, 00:11:20 03/14/03 Fri
phatt, dope, u got my vote! i can�t really say that u would need any improvement.....keep spittin, let it be heard, word! BLAH BLAH BAH, etc. yours is the illah verses, on this battle u da killah (NT) -- chromenine, 03:21:10 03/14/03 Fri
Other dude's verse was tight, itd sound nice live... Yours was better written tho, better flow and everything else.. a couple lines made me smile..u get my vote.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 04:49:50 03/14/03 Fri
Come on now Vision....Do you really need us to tell you who won...I'm voting for the other guy..Just because someone needs to and to teach you a lesson about picking on inferior emcees...now either play fair or put your nose in the corner..lol...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 09:29:39 03/14/03 Fri
I dunno blackcloud u shit was good, but i dunno it didn't feel like u really put any heart into urs, kinda like u were just rappin to rap, which is ok, but Vision I felt like he was rappin from his soul, and i dunno i just felt his shit more, maybe it wasn't as lyrical, but it felt like he wanted it more, so I pick Vision -- INS, 09:38:27 03/14/03 Fri
I think the first battler got this one... dont like visions verse at all... but both did a fine job... piece (NT) -- the dark spitter, 14:57:34 03/14/03 Fri
to the battle -- lyrikal mindz, 19:30:45 03/14/03 Fri

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