As I told Cirrus above, I should have said that the story for this speak week had to be a completely original work from scratch. However, I think it would have been a real loss if you had never brought this story to light. his was truly a great read, Mike!
the somber tone that you started with was awesome, and Sam's coming out, with Danny's understanding of what had happened after the fact...really well done.
I would definitely find ways of avoiding using markings like "-----" to separate parts of the story though. Sometimes, a simple 'transition' sentence or two would be much better than using those. I know that sometimes it's easier to do it that way, especially when you're under pressure, but I think the story stands just fine without them.
A bittersweet story, but well worth the read. Thanks, Mike! :)
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