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Date Posted: 07:27:33 05/11/15 Mon
Author: Comicality
Subject: A touching story indeed....
In reply to: Mike84 's message, "Flashback (2015) By Mike84" on 09:38:22 05/08/15 Fri


As I told Cirrus above, I should have said that the story for this speak week had to be a completely original work from scratch. However, I think it would have been a real loss if you had never brought this story to light. his was truly a great read, Mike!

the somber tone that you started with was awesome, and Sam's coming out, with Danny's understanding of what had happened after the fact...really well done.

I would definitely find ways of avoiding using markings like "-----" to separate parts of the story though. Sometimes, a simple 'transition' sentence or two would be much better than using those. I know that sometimes it's easier to do it that way, especially when you're under pressure, but I think the story stands just fine without them.

A bittersweet story, but well worth the read. Thanks, Mike! :)

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