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Date Posted: 13:24:24 01/05/01 Fri
Author: MC Hicks
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Subject: Feedback Needed

I would like any and all feedback on this poem. Criticism, interpretation, spelling...anything.


Title: a drop Above, a drop Below

Rise up and take your position in the World,
Donít you know who you are?

Beat along with the heart of
Can you hear it?
The life that is flowing?

Thatís who you are, that IS who you ARE!!
But you are losing your elasticity.
Your lack of acceptance and duty will send you
to an early grave.

Rigidity is not welcome here,
or anywhere.
You must bend. You mustÖor you will break.

Donít worry, many more will be created
to take your place.
And they will carry on
where you could not
(because of your cement filled mind.)
You were not always so hard.

Donít you want to live?
To be a drop in
the Great AmazonÖ
to see the wild world that she sees.

Run and breath the air
that you were meant to carry
(in your selfish lungs!)
Wake up and rise! Shout your life that every
drop can hear!

-mch- 04/05/00

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