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>>hi mars:hope you don't mind if i share the swings on >this new playground--this is an excellent piece of >writing--have suggestions below--enjoyed!!__chelle > > >Roberto Duran’s Demise >> >> He stared in disbelief across (might like "he stared >his disbelief across"--kind of like the sound of that) >> canvass over padded plywood (sp canvas--also would >prefer "wood" --you don't need that extra syllable) >> opponent of right, and wrong >> not thinking outside the box. (or perhaps "without" >for outside--double e there) >> Even I didn’t see it coming.(excellent) >> >> Being of long patience >> leaves a pitiful short fuse.(wow this is superb) >> He kept grabbing and whispering >> fickle nothings, derisive (oh my 'fickle >nothings"!!! love it mars) >> so I clown-punched him.(and out w/a punch...great >read) >> >> Mars

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