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Date Posted: 17:36:57 05/13/00 Sat
Author: mahin
Subject: Re: dear f
In reply to: karen 's message, "dear f" on 19:15:54 05/11/00 Thu

dear f as in dear fucker

i have some comments below that came to my mind, might
not make the poem any better, but i'l mention them anyways.

and yeah, don't disappear again!

> who is this girl
> who keeps me up most nights
> and shoves herself
> down the throats of my dreams
> so that i wake up
> to the taste of her,
> making me think
> that i had caught her
> from you(r) mouth?
> did i catch her from your mouth? --don't need this?
>
> i ask you about her
> constantly,
> and you fill me up
> with words about her,
> (about) how she carried her pain
> like blood,
> close to the suface of her skin,
> ready to pour out
> with the smallest injury
> of word, skin, drink. -- i didn't get the drink part.
>
> here, let me touch you.
> she is so, so close to you
> that i can see her
> leaning over your shoulder, smirking,
> her fingers icicles dripping
> gold and diamonds
> down your chest.
>
> go on, cut me with her name again,
> cut me until i freeze over
> staring up at the stars
> that glitter as hard
> as tear-crystalled eyes.
>
> cut yourself
> until your mouth freezes open,
(maybe you could do something like cut your mouth open)
> your lips forever forming
> the one syllable
> that sticks in your throat like a blade.

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