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Date Posted: 20:25:12 11/01/00 Wed
Author: 夢境 4D 周淑萍
Subject: 同學佳作欣賞

  滴答!滴答!「怎麼漆黑一片的,後面還好像有人追著我呢!」
我喘著氣焦慮地想著,腳還是不停地走。跑著!跑著!跑了一段路
後,突然看前面有一道熾眼的光。「那埵野X口啊!」我興奮地喊
著,然後加快了速度,向出口奔去。到了出口,看見周圍全都是年紀
很大的大廈,但總覺得這堳僂翿x呢!再往前跑之後,看見一間殘舊
的小學,抬眼一看「元朗天主教小學」我吃驚著。「怎麼會這樣的,
這堣ㄛO已拆毀了的嗎?」口中唸唸有詞地想著。這間小學是我一至
三年級的母校,在我四年級因搬屋而轉校,但早前我已知道母校已經
被拆毀了,為甚麼現在又……

  我推開鐵閘走進這面積不大的校園,在這載滿回憶的「母親」
四處懷緬回憶。「鈴……鈴……」鐘聲響起了,四週開始嘈吵起來,
有些小朋友跑到兩側的走廊跳「橡皮繩」,有些爭先恐後的買零食,
較大的則奔外面的操場上追逐。我坐在一張空凳上看著這種種,回憶
起以前快樂無憂的日子。突然,我看見一個熟悉的小身影,「這怎麼
會呀!」心中在驚訝著。我定神一看,這是真的沒有眼花呢!我竟然
看到幼時的自己。「她」正和朋友一起嬉戲。我鼓起勇氣走過去問
「她」:「小朋友,你叫甚麼名字呀?」「她」顯得不知所措,我看
見「她」這樣我便說:「姐姐,可不可以和你一起玩?我沒有惡意
的!」「她」點起頭。我和「她」和「她」的朋友玩了些已經很久沒
有接觸的小玩意,甚至要自己教回「自己」呢!

  鐘聲響起,「她」從口袋媯馱F我一隻粉紅色的紙鶴,並叮囑我
要好好保存。

  「鏈……鏈……」鬧鐘把我從夢中抽回現實中,醒來時竟發現窗
台上有一隻粉紅色的紙鶴,這究竟是夢還是真的呢?



評語:很好的一篇文章!作者不自覺走進了小說的神秘地帶,而且活
用人稱,將故事的高潮推向一種詭異(明明「自言自語」,「她」和
「我」卻玩起來)的情景,在這一情況下,真地令人不知「是夢還是
真」。

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