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Date Posted: 17:12:57 01/14/01 Sun
Author: 4D 彭婉珊 
Subject: 小說



  走著,走著,在這漆黑一片的隧道中,不知走了多久,也不知前路究竟是甚麼,只是漫無目的地向前行。這時,發現有一些刺眼的光芒射進這隧道中,高興著終於找到了出口,亦不顧一切走出隧道。
  一踏出隧道時,發覺到那堥瓣ㄙ器D是甚麼地方,也從來沒有到過。那埵陬菑@大片草原,但天色昏暗,亦不見陽光,瀰漫著薄薄的迷霧,微風輕輕吹過,掠過這一片草原,發出沙沙的聲音。
  我只是慢慢地走著,矇矓中,發現霧中有一人影,而且正向我這邊走來,我慌慌張張地看著,無形中有種恐懼感襲來。
  終於看清了那人影,原來是一個女孩子,留著長長的頭髮,配著一雙大眼睛,還有一張可愛的臉龐。頓時放下了心頭大石,那恐懼感亦離開了。
  她用雙眼睛凝視著我,我便向她作了自我介紹,原來她的名字叫阿婷。
  我便問她這堿O甚麼地方,但她並沒有回答,只是一直低下頭看著地下,好像在想甚麼似的,見她並沒有回答,我便放棄了追問。
  這時,她提議一起玩,我想也沒想,便點了點頭,應承了她。之後我便和她在這片草原上玩耍,追追趕趕。
  玩了一會兒,天上竟下起了雨,而且越下越大,我們便跑到樹下避雨,撥著衣服上的水珠。過了一會,雨勢仍然沒有減弱,我們便坐下來,開始聊天。
  就這樣,我們談了很多很多,成為了好朋友。


評語:

掌握了基本的敘事技巧,讀來暢順。可惜情節交代不甚清晰,結尾亦嫌急速了點。

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