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Date Posted: 14:34:22 05/13/01 Sun
Author: Rafaél
Subject: Re: Bedouin Nights
In reply to: Bono and Raphaela 's message, "Bedouin Nights" on 18:26:57 05/12/01 Sat

Great to see you two writing together, I preume that was
what you were doing lol.
Very good imagery for this particular setting, the only real
crit I could have, is the perspectives from each set of
phrases delivered by each individual can get confusing with
regard to who is who. but then that could also be part of the
intertwining that is occuring here, "breasts resemble"(s) may
be an easier transition.

well done

take care

Rafael

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