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Date Posted: 16:58:12 02/02/01 Fri
Author: Rafaél
Subject: Re: Dreamstate/My Angel
In reply to: Galena 's message, "Dreamstate/My Angel" on 23:22:59 01/29/01 Mon

Re: Dreamstate,

I quite like this form, stanza 2 however seems to lose the
flow that prevails in Stanza one at the second line,
Personally I would work to give a more consistent feel
to this piece.
Regarding content, this is quite sound here, although could
border on cliche in one or two lines, but then every word
can become cliche eventually so I guess we just use what we
want as and when lol.

My angel,

Also displays inconsistent form through the stanzas.
The two poems are both enjoyable to read, if you are not
concerned by rigid form they are good pieces.

I will be honest and say personally that if I start writing
form I have to keep the same throughout, but then that is me lol,
and the world would be strange if we all saw it the same way,

Thanks for posting,

Rafael

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