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Date Posted: 10:08:13 02/05/01 Mon
Author: Rafaél
Subject: Re: It's Me That You Hurt!
In reply to: krysalis 's message, "It's Me That You Hurt!" on 20:23:03 02/04/01 Sun

Great poem Michelle,

This is pure reading pleasure, and deserves a little more
work getting that flow evened out.

Looking closely at the stanzas, and lines of each, I think
perhaps syllable counts 12 line 1, 2&3 11, and line 4, 12
for each stanza.

This would prevent meter orientated fuss pots like me tripping
over as I get into the flow lol.

This reads great as it is, but is one of those pieces that I
would be spending that extra time on had I written it.

Thank you, and yes this place does have a great feel to it
considering the short time it has been running.

Take care

Rafael

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