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Date Posted: 09:39:39 01/13/04 Tue
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB09a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.171
Subject: Re: Wild, Wild Horses
In reply to: Gray Squirrel 's message, "Wild, Wild Horses" on 22:06:30 01/12/04 Mon

I liked the first stanza best - smooth flow, good pace.

At first I wasn't sure about the change of form and thought the rest of the poem was disjointed. However, on reflection I think this mirrors the theme of the poem, imitating the sense of loss and a life that is disjointed without the lover.

I am rambling so feel free to ignore my thoughts - but why the title 'Wild, Wild Horses' - am I missing something obvious?

R


>Wild, Wild Horses
>
>I lost you in the sunlight
>So I turned to find the shade,
>Like the dreams we buy at night
>Upon the promises we've made...
>
>Can't stand the silence anymore,
>Can't forget the fight.
>
>Stepping soft in cotton shoes
>You barely left my arms, while
>The constant mistake I've made with you
>Still stays that warm...
>
>So the fire aches
>In the chill
>Of this frigid waiting.
>
>You have a quiet broken heart,
>And stifled tears, I imagine,
>When you hear me screaming...
>
>But, well... that... that... still...
>That's well worth believing.
>
>-Gray Squirrel

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