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Date Posted: 13:22:22 01/16/04 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB07a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.169
Subject: Re: In Nights Out
In reply to: AGS 's message, "In Nights Out" on 20:07:07 12/26/03 Fri

I like the dreamy quality of this poem as well as the imagery - although at the end I felt unsatisfied - the description seems to hide the intent and, being the greedy me, I wanted a resolution.

R

>It was always best
>to nestle
>eyes,
>
>in deep; that
>nest you kept
>reserved
>
>from winds that swept
>and blistering sun, that
>held high in sky
>
>Such a torment:
>to stay put,
>
>not move
>till falling grains
>allowed her
>choose
>
>She knew
>that the fluxes in earth
>would grind halted
>accordingly, send her
>signals
>when to, and when not
>
>As all slowed
>from dimmest light
>to explosions
>in deep black
>
>The sparrows; robins, clung
>to barest branch;
>knew, as well
>
>momentarily
>
>As eyes rolled
>to discern
>what was, merely vibrations
>
>They clipped
>tops of heads,
>and small ears
>
>held beaks
>as not to miss
>
>The churning
>of the axis of sun
>as more flames
>gathered than
>in times before
>
>and drips
>like plaster boiling
>fell, felt
>on even floor
>
>tiny holes
>so small to see
>to burn slowly
>
>and great trees
>in forests made
>no sound
>when they felled

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