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Date Posted: 11:53:23 01/25/04 Sun
Author: Highlander
Author Host/IP: pD9037FC3.dip.t-dialin.net / 217.3.127.195
Subject: Re: To Know The Vault Of Thought
In reply to: AGS 's message, "To Know The Vault Of Thought" on 07:04:06 01/07/04 Wed

Nice one Al, your work always leaves me scratching my head after the first read (which is indeed a great asset to have, when you first listen to a U2 album that same effect applies also). Your work is never obvious (which shows real talent for writing poetry as it should be written). I have only one question though on this, in regards to this line

"It shall
catch glances the sun"

Should there not be "of" or "at" in there or is it that i have spent too much time in a foreign country that i lost my English...hahaha.

Anyway, very vivid stuff with great and solid writing skills from perhaps one of the more prominent writers on the net.

Congrats from the Highlander

>To peer
>there knowing -
>
>the conglomeration
>of assortment
>so true,
>
>that glances
>by rim
>
>of your eye
>
>And knowing,
>I see
>there too,
>
>quite well;
>The pages you roll
>as you turn
>so sweetly
>your eye:
>
>It shall
>catch glances the sun
>as it saturates it way,
>right to you;
>
>As a dove
>alighting
>its fall
>
>So softness
>it beams
>your light
>
>To gaze,
>seek only those treasure
>that you hide
>
>and so well hidden
>the banks
>inside,
>
>by softest mud
>of the river;
>
>That long stemmed grass
>in peak
>so waving
>
>in tears,
>that shall never grow
>
>I saw you by you small desk
>weaving and hence
>
>you've decided to say
>I just might
>do it this way,
>in prance
>
>Soft spells turned
>by ornamentation of words
>
>They shall drip their lavender
>pearl
>as tiny dew drop
>
>to the bucket you hide;
>near
>inside
>
>That constant dripping was
>always a drag;
>
>no more weapons inside
>for the ride
>
>as you pondered in softened,
>a skill,
>to make your words wide
>
>Contain
>all that's honey,
>
>the recipe contained -
>
>with its sugar
>and melt
>down your side
>
>With, like a silt
>such tiny bits
>there so felt
>
>and there you
>to glide
>as felt
>
>It was all that way for you,
>to touch,
>
>with sanded fingers
>all that's velvet;
>
>by your heart
>
>Its many membranes so familiar to you,
>as small locked portals
>
>and so wide opened
>you look
>
>Far cross
>that river side
>
>Its turn and salt
>felt deeply
>and guide

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Re: To Know The Vault Of Thought -- AGS, 22:01:16 01/28/04 Wed