Re: The Sliver Of Glass -- Unicorn

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Date Posted: 09:14:00 02/18/04 Wed
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB16a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.178
Subject: Re: The Sliver Of Glass
In reply to: AGS 's message, "Re: The Sliver Of Glass" on 06:24:28 02/18/04 Wed

You mustn't change anything unless you wish to - I was merely thinking out loud (at least you know I read and re-read and contemplate the poems!) and the reader is never privvy to all the writer's intentions and as such I respect that individuality. We do not have to conform to expectation but that is the advantage of such a forum - discussion different ways something might be appreciated - don't you think?

R

>hey R
>
>Yeah, huffing and puffing over here breaking up the
>room hehe,
>
>Well if you say night would work better, I think you
>might be right
>
>I was also thinking
>
>>does flow the miseries(') nights - might be ok to,
>double pluralities
>
>I thought that would make it a little more seeping, a
>little more haunting, but who know, I will probably
>change it to night
>
>I was thinking leaving a syllable out in the nights
>line gave it a more hurried pushing quality, like a
>beat missing, and therefore actentuate, the literal
>miserableness, but who know, you're most likely
>right, al
>>

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