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Date Posted: 13:38:11 03/19/04 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: dsl-80-46-138-67.access.uk.tiscali.com / 80.46.138.67
Subject: Re: Losing
In reply to: Gray Squirrel 's message, "Losing" on 00:41:00 03/06/04 Sat

I particulary liked the second stanza. The alliteration draws attention to the words expressed. The last two contrasting lines sum it up quite well.


R ;)



>Losing
>
>A spectator in the middle of the parade,
>As flowered floats and jovial instruments
>Jostle by...
>
>You looked at me with love
>That had waited so long
>To finally awake,
>To hold me like a
>Sleep stained pillow.
>
>Your reflection in windows.
>
>I will repeat my saddest goodbye to you,
>With blinking eyes, trying...
>Fallen now, under foot.
>
>Like a mantra, goodbye,
>Goodbye to you,
>Fighting the hope of your face,
>Hello?
>Goodbye.
>
>-Gray Squirrel

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