Date Posted:02:56:08 04/12/04 Mon Author:Raphaela Author Host/IP: dsl-80-43-86-173.access.uk.tiscali.com / 80.43.86.173 Subject: Re: One-Two, Three-Four(ammended) In reply to:
Rafaél
's message, "One-Two, Three-Four(ammended)" on 00:18:56 04/11/04 Sun
Perfect rhythm and rhyme give this a steady beat, which works well with the subject matter. I liked the imagery too.
Good to see your work again and I look forward to seeing the African influence coming through your writing.
If you wish to link another page to here, you could display your art work.
Raphaela
>One Two, Three four
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>I taste your blood,
>or is it mine?
>The sky bleeds too
>a glass of wine,
>To seal what fate
>a scar will heal,
>Another beat
>does not conceal.
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>The lifeless fowl
>upon its plate.
>To sacrifice
>this destined date.
>A distant call
>said far too much.
>The moth now dies,
>the flame it touched.
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