Re: Dark Flower: for Eve Ensler -- Unicorn

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Date Posted: 16:22:55 08/02/03 Sat
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB01a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.163
Subject: Re: Dark Flower: for Eve Ensler
In reply to: Paris Lovecraft 's message, "Dark Flower: for Eve Ensler" on 12:14:03 08/02/03 Sat

Although this is a general forum site, with a separate linked site for children it may be best to put your warning
"*Parentl discretion is advised* :o)" on the subject line as no doubt if they started to read they would be intrigued enough to read on! I don't censor Unicorn unless something is racist, homophobic or obviously discriminatory in anyway but sometimes warnings could be helpful.

A strong and interesting extended metaphor. 'It was the hieroglyph of the fury of her displeasure' - which links the physical with the mental persona of the woman.

I particularly liked the first stanza.

"The woman's vagina
screams from beneath her skirt,
like the spawn of Carnivean;
wails through its vertical mouth,
skin-tag tongue quivering
in lewd rage"

I found the last one a bit of a tongue twister.

Not the first time you have written about Eve Ensler and now you have me intrigued by this muse.

Good to see your work here Paris.

Raphaela :)

>*Parentl discretion is advised* :o)
>______________________________________
>I.
>
>The woman's vagina
>screams from beneath her skirt,
>like the spawn of Carnivean;
>wails through its vertical mouth,
>skin-tag tongue quivering
>in lewd rage
>
>II.
>
>It was the hieroglyph
>of the fury of her displeasure,
>its sneering countenance mocking
>in the betrayal of the mirror;
>she looked and she burned
>with the fury of the twin scarlet suns burning
>in her cheeks;
>a tunnel for the descendants,
>a cave in which to sate the dog
>
>III.
>
>She slew of the thoughts of;
>she slew the wonder of;
>she slew the questions about;
>
>IV.
>
>The dark flower,
>at night, undercover
>of gown,
>of blanket,
>of darkness,
>is a piece of meat
>tied to the end of a length of string,
>sacrificial meat
>awaiting the dog;
>the dog feasts!
>
>V.
>
>She circumsized
>to circumscribe
>to banish
>the thoughts of,
>the wonder of,
>the questions about,
>to the dungeon
>in the castle
>in her head
>
>
>pl

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