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Date Posted: 08:22:44 10/08/03 Wed
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB05a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.167
Subject: Re: Nine Lines
In reply to: Rafa�l 's message, "Nine Lines" on 16:40:24 09/27/03 Sat

The way each line flows into the next works well here. I like the sense of innocence portrayed together with the open end.

Always a pleasure to read your work.

Raphaela

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>The curtains open and again I find the scent of earth
>when grazed by beast at least they were in days my
>mind had pure intent or innocence deprived of what?
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>The dew as early morning wet and succulent as she
>who walked upon that grass with eagerness at once
>sat by my side aware and drawn towards my glance.
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>The breaking of each stem without that snap goodbye
>disjointed where they join, where flows the very sap
>another breath is drawn: each kiss; insists reply��
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Re: Nine Lines -- Dimon, 14:56:54 10/12/03 Sun