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Date Posted: 14:28:08 10/26/03 Sun
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB03a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.165
Subject: Re: California Burning
In reply to: Leisa*) 's message, "California Burning" on 08:18:58 10/26/03 Sun

I was wondering what this was about when I first read it just before. The fires have just been reported on our news so all makes sense now. We had severe fires in parts of Europe too during the summer.

I like the way you have intertwined the destruction of the fires with nature trying to emerge through the smoke in the first stanza. The second stanza personalises the experience and the contrast of ordinary activity with the reminder of the threat works well.

Hope all is well with you and yours.


Raphaela


>California Burning
>
>I wake to a black sky
>grey ashes cover our cars
>You can smell the demon
>in the air
>looking eastward, the sun
>breaks through an eerie shade
>with a blue sky tucked under
>the smoke
>
>A black slender cinder
>lands on the lawn chair
>next to me as I sip
>morning coffee and breathe
>tainted scent
>
>*)
>10.26.03

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