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Date Posted: 13:57:47 02/25/03 Tue
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB05a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.167
Subject: Re: Duet
In reply to: Rafa�l 's message, "Duet" on 11:01:02 02/25/03 Tue

This has to be read out loud to fully appreciate the steady flow and meter.

The theme is clear. The tone strong and language to the point.

Many good lines here but these had the most effect on me:

'The moon shall not alight the night
a scream instead will notify'

The moon is normally associated with sensuality but here the image seems to be so horrific to inspire a scream.

You should get together with Highlander and write a song on this subject.

Do you want me add The chasm to the links at the bottom of Unicorn?

Raphaela

>Duet
>
>The words resound around the walls
>so chosen to corrupt the mind
>and soon the bombs released to fall
>with consequence for all to find.
>
>Each bribe is paid to buy some more
>reluctant sets the going rate
>divide each hand on every shore
>disrupt that quote of super-state.
>
>Their song is sung but what a pair
>un-elected bush reiterates
>as blair resounds a dark despair
>his pen concludes another date.
>
>Too many lies have blurred the cause
>a blinded mass alone accepts
>till straw is drawn defining force
>reminding some respective debt.
>
>The moon shall not alight the night
>a scream instead will notify
>as blood and bone prepared to fight
>too many more; will surely die.
>
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