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Date Posted: 15:21:19 02/25/03 Tue
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB06a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.168
Subject: Re: Happier Dreamers
In reply to: Leisa*) 's message, "Happier Dreamers" on 10:54:35 02/05/03 Wed

I apologise for taking so long to catch up with the wonderful poems posted here - but as you know I have certain demands on my time just now. However, it is always a pleasure to read such work as this.

I like the contrasting imagery and the alliteration works well here adding emphasis.

I particularly liked these lines

where the ocean meets
the sun
and skies that fall
from stars that break
apart

beautiful yet well expressed. Hope to see more of your work here.

Raphaela

>Happier Dreamers
>
>I have dreams that fuel
>fires, fractured
>fires that make no sense
>
>of ex's alive and dead
>and the walking dead
>and those who walk between
>a purgatorial paraphrased passage
>
>It's a cold morning
>with heat pouring over
>limbs and veins
>
>My dreams aren't happier
>they stream in and out
>like a ticker tape parade
>of past, present and future
>
>A natural blend of emotion
>disavowed, disallowed
>dismembered trains
>of thought that keep
>perfect time with markers
>
>I dream of wars
>and battle scars
>that don't heal
>of blood rushing
>through streets
>where the ocean meets
>the sun
>and skies that fall
>from stars that break
>apart
>as we weep;
>mourn all we have known
>
>Leisa*)
>02.05.03

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