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Date Posted: 22:43:19 02/28/03 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB01a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.163
Subject: Re: The Tear
In reply to: PoeticHeart 's message, "The Tear" on 11:32:01 02/27/03 Thu

I found this excellent Poetic - the rhythm and rhyme gave it a slow steady flow, while the narrative quality gave it depth and emotion.

Much enjoyed if that is appropriate given the content but referrign to the quality of your writing.

Raphaela


>The Tear
>A single tear streams down his face
>From the corner of his eye
>How did he come to such a place?
>What makes a strong man cry?
>
>Losing the love of the one he loves
>May cause that tear to form
>The woman he held up above
>Once together, now are torn
>
>Lost in love, left broken hearted
>Recollections of the past
>She once loved, now dis-reguared
>The love they thought would last
>
>Greatful of what he once had
>Dispising all the lies
>All alone left mad and sad
>Now that strong man cries!
>
>by: poeticheart

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