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Date Posted: 22:49:35 02/28/03 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB01a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.163
Subject: Re: Fleeting Stars
In reply to: AGS 's message, "Fleeting Stars" on 21:57:13 02/26/03 Wed

Your poetry never ceases to delight me Al and what a great opening 'Your kiss is aromatic' - just invites the reader to read on.

What you then find is an amazing discovery of imagery and thoughts. I particularly liked the lines

'and there I float
suspended now
in your arrogance'

Congratulations on the publication of this poem Sidewalks End - well deserved.

Raphaela

>Your kiss is aromatic
>a pleasure to be
>
>seem
>
>s
>
>like music
>as the secret charms I hide inside
>whistle
>spark
>ignite
>their secret too
>
>The flames
>that roar
>unhampered
>dashing madly
>their circumpherence
>wielding hot
>that melts
>so
>grounds I stand upon ..
>
>they dripping beneath me
>with sullen eyes
>looking
>with exclamation points
>that near whisper
>now Charlie
>you're on your own
>
>and
>I see them
>vanish
>as a candle
>s
>wax
>to eternities floor
>
>they wale
>in their sacrificial drops
>bleeding
>
>diving
>for grounds
>it will take
>forever to splat
>as the ground
>whispers to me
>"we are leaving"
>as I see
>it all vanish
>and there I float
>suspended now
>in your arrogance
>your whispers
>of stares
>that illuminate
>that
>it is only
>us
>alive
>and whole
>in this morsel
>of a
>universe
>as I look beyond
>to see all
>stars
>fleeting

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