Date Posted:08:21:52 03/02/03 Sun Author:Raphaela Author Host/IP: webcacheB04a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.166 Subject: Re: Draught In reply to:
AGS
's message, "Draught" on 06:00:30 10/22/02 Tue
Sorry for not commenting on this sooner but it is taking me a while to catch up with commenting on all the posts.
I like the slow steady pace of this poem, complemented by the line breaks, and the anguish behind the tear-filled eyes seem to tell another story.
Raphaela
>The tears
>around
>the lower lids
>of your eyes
>beg
>for more
>water,
>
>cleaning;
>a nourishment
>you offer
>far too seldom,
>
>in the heat
>which you walk
>
>Barren like
>the skies
>overhead
>
>a blue
>they are
>bored of
>
>Clouds
>always on
>the way
>
>a drought
>to be
>
>created
>somewhere
>else
