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Date Posted: 23:33:21 03/04/03 Tue
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB03a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.165
Subject: Re: COPPER FLAME
In reply to: GEORGE CARLE 's message, "COPPER FLAME" on 12:57:18 03/04/03 Tue

I like the way this narrative poem sets the scene for that amazing penultimate stanza which just dances with vitality and the descriptive colour imagery certainly becomes very visual.


'Coils of copper wire
Snaked through the flames
Writhing with thermal death
Giving out blue beauty
And green emeralds
In their dying throes'

Thank you for sharing your talent with Unicorn. Much enjoyed and hope to read more.

Raphaela



>Two black bin bags
>Full of things to burn
>Set side by side
>In the angle between
>House and garage
>
>The red tipped swan
>Burned my fingers
>As it burned down
>When I lit the fire clumsily
>
>The flames consumed
>With heat and smoke
>Of burning
>
>Coils of copper wire
>Snaked through the flames
>Writhing with thermal death
>Giving out blue beauty
>And green emeralds
>In their dying throes
>
>Then it was over
>Almost before the end.

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