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Date Posted: 23:12:17 08/30/02 Fri
Author: Raphaela
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Subject: Re: Another poem
In reply to: Richard Blake 's message, "Re: Another poem" on 17:32:20 08/26/02 Mon

Al makes some very good points here and I also see where you are coming from and I understand that kind of writing - similar to my senryu sketches at times.

This poem is showing a lot of promise and worth fine tuning. Sometimes it is good to capture the raw emotion and inspiration and come back to it some time later when you can look at it more objectively. This isn't always necessary or desired but sometimes something good can thus become excellent.

Raphaela

>I guess this is more of a sketch than a fully fleshed
>poem. I often write these sketches because I mean to
>convey an idea, not a story or an extended
>philosophical statement. I am meaning "embittered
>rhymes" as in "embittered poetry". I write some
>depressing crap, but I am never depressed when I write
>it. Sort of parodoxical, but I cannot feel or
>"channel" an emotion in order to write. It is deeply
>rooted in my soul, so it surfaces when I am feeling
>neutral. Anyway, I think I may be saying that I am
>drowning out my emotion with sadness by writing bitter
>poetry...the other stanza is simply saying I need a
>friend there to bring back the memories of happiness
>since they are all I have sometimes.

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