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Date Posted: 23:55:52 08/30/02 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheM06b.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.194.16
Subject: Re: Sound
In reply to: pet 's message, "Sound" on 13:10:55 08/29/02 Thu

I like the way you ask questions directly to the reader, inviting them to engage with the thoughts contained within the poem, to reflect, ponder and then the last three lines underpin the whole poem giving it real meaning.

I like your use of imagery also 'music of a hissing snake', 'sound of a falling star...' and particularly the way the sound starts off quiet - a droplet of water etc. but then each stanza escalates to a 'scream' or a 'crash'. This makes the quieter, unfinished last stanza more poignant.

and an extract from one of my earlier poems:

'Sound of our silence
with each minute gets louder'

Raphaela





>Sound
>
>Is it heard when a single,
>lonesome droplet of water
>crashes into the vast ocean?
>
>Is the music of a hissing snake
>heard in the middle of
>a windswept desert?
>
>Does the sound of a falling star
>scream inside your head?
>
>Ask the lonely woman
>whos heartbeat is also
>heard by no one.....
>
>
>pet
>2002

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