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Date Posted: 16:41:51 09/11/02 Wed
Author: Sandie Angel :o)
Author Host/IP: HSE-Ottawa-ppp157180.sympatico.ca / 64.229.129.105
Subject: Re: Paper Lion
In reply to: Raphaela 's message, "Re: Paper Lion" on 13:48:24 09/10/02 Tue

>Sounds like a life without meaning.
>
>Structurally I think it would be better if the first
>stanza were to be just 2 lines like the rest of the
>poem (unless posting it lost that intent)
>
>I like the title and the simplicity of the poem
>becomes its strength.
>
>R
>
>
>
>>Paper Lion
>>By Sandie Angel :o)
>>
>>
>>I am but a paper lion
>>for I can�t make a jump
>>I cry without any tears
>>for my tears had run dry
>>
>>I roar without any sound
>>for there�s no one here to listen
>>
>>I walk without any trace
>>for I won�t take another step
>>
>>I see without any forms
>>for my eyes hadn�t been there
>>
>>I have no heart
>>for it�s been broken
>>
>>I have no soul
>>for it�s been dead
>>
>>I shall lie here in my dreams
>>and just wait�..
>>
>>�.and just wait�..
>>
>>Copyright � Sandie Angel :o)
>>August 28, 2002

Yes, Raphaela! You are so right. I did have it in two stanzas as 2 lines each. However, I didn't know that when I posted this poem, the two stanzas had stuck together for some reasons, I didn't realize it until I hit the submit button, then it was tooo late to change it.

Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem!

Sandie Angel :o)

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