Re: In Silence I Drown -- Unicorn

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Date Posted: 23:51:53 09/13/02 Fri
Author: Raphaela
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Subject: Re: In Silence I Drown
In reply to: Icyheart 's message, "In Silence I Drown" on 17:40:28 09/05/02 Thu

I particularly like this one Icy - the extended metaphor works well and the tone continues throughout the poem, yet there are no unnecessary words. In my opinion these would make good lyrics for a song, the repetition of theme linking it together.

Let me know if you would like me to link your new site to Unicorn at the bottom of the page.

R

>In Silence I drown
>
>In silence I drown
>living a life of dying dreams
>as one at a time get chopped down
>
>When sitting alone
>my mind turns dark as death
>like the night settling on the dead zone
>
>Alone in a world meant for two
>the only light I have
>is when thinking of you
>
>Now like everything before
>that light is starting to dim
>heralding the return of feelings I abhor
>
>As in silence I drown
>visions of you fade
>as the sun goes down
>
>Placing my final thoughts
>in the darkening abyss
>locking my heart in a vault
>
>Taking no more chances
>surrendering to lonliness
>killing the music, no more dances
>
>Allowing darkness to envelop me
>shutting out all hope
>that the light of love i will see
>
>By my own choosing i lay down
>allowing darkness blanket me
>as in silence I drown
>
>icyheart

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Re: In Silence I Drown -- icyheart, 16:15:47 09/17/02 Tue