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Date Posted: 09:05:47 10/31/05 Mon
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: 88-111-135-105.dynamic.dsl.as9105.com / 88.111.135.105
Subject: Re: Long Lips Of Spring
In reply to: AAAGGGSSS 's message, "Long Lips Of Spring" on 05:06:35 10/31/05 Mon

Great imagery as always and your own unique turn of phrase. I was very intrigued bye the endline "and the drop/grew longer" as the ending took me by surprise.


>the wind
>has a dripping melody
>you can hear it through the trees
>yearn
>ing
>again
>for the splashes
>of vagrant sunlight
>
>she to nestle
>as she will
>
>turbulent seas -
>with their high chromatic blend
>of orchestrated sound
>upon the window
>leaves her floated tears
>that sought my soul
>when the clouds low
>they strolled
>near the meadow
>and each small blade of green long grass
>shivered
>in her airs
>of passing
>
>it was the water that I did see
>only
>
>slide
>in her defeated state
>wide
>and every bump was remembered
>and the drop
>grew longer

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