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Date Posted: 15:15:37 07/28/02 Sun
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB12a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.174
Subject: Re: Mistress In Wings
In reply to: AAAAGGGSSS 's message, "Mistress In Wings" on 10:09:39 07/28/02 Sun

Very innovative! Interesting imagery. It has an almost unfinished feel to it which I think the reader will continue in his/her own mind.

Not sure about the splitting of "n't" in this stanza

that was
n't

R

>She embraces me
>the Mistress,
>with wings
>un
>folded
>
>Sought as I was
>through galaxies
>that
>could see
>
>though
>I thought
>nothing there
>in the light
>
>that was
>n't
>
>With wings
>and a swishing
>that chilled my
>ears
>
>nourished
>bubbles
>that flowed
>into my heart
>
>the sounds wailed
>so deafening
>as though
>on a Starship
>
>She appeared
>with eyes
>of stunning
>blue
>
>ish green
>
>hints of yellow
>too in
>satellites
>that orbited
>
>Sent out
>electronic blurps
>that sought to
>know my fragile
>n delicate workings
>
>and with tiny fingers
>
>painted in nighttime
>horizons
>she did the work
>commissioned
>
>helped me shed
>this blanket
>abandoned
>I sought to keep so
>
>thought
>just so
>important

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