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Date Posted: 15:45:18 07/11/02 Thu
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB04a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.166
Subject: Re: Sierra Sleep
In reply to: Gray Squirrel 's message, "Sierra Sleep" on 02:18:48 07/07/02 Sun

This has to be one of my favourite's of yours up till now. The use of imagery and the structure blends itself well. It is late here for me and I am too tired to give any technical commentary, however I did enjoy this poem and will look forward to reading it again.

Raphaela



>Sierra Sleep
>
>The granite stones
>To the stream below
>Rushing incognito
>Where the trees
>Steal the sun.
>
>The sun, flickering
>Golden on the edges
>Leaf to leaf...
>Melted, falling.
>
>A sigh to you,
>My purpose, my lost,
>A deep inhale.
>
>I am the cracks
>Beneath my own feet,
>A spectre of
>Your lips, your walk...
>
>I am a severed limb
>Fallen to the
>Rippling water,
>Caught in a narrow,
>Pressed harder...
>
>I am the the silt
>And the sand
>Swirled and spun,
>Paint on the sheets
>Beneath a clear
>Wrinkled blanket.
>
>-Gray Squirrel

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