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Date Posted: 14:53:43 06/25/02 Tue
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB04a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.166
Subject: Re: The Creek
In reply to: Morcastlin 's message, "The Creek" on 21:15:42 06/24/02 Mon

Welcome back to Unicorn Mors - great to see you here again.

The repetition of the first line gives this a lyrical quality and I could imagine it being sung like the ballads of old.

I like the way the rhythm of life passes by in the poem as well as the self-reflection in the endline.

Raphaela

>The Creek
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>The water is always so cool and clear
>You can see down to the stony bottom
>Oh, but not into the creek's restless heart.
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>It is my own small piece of paradise
>The shady forrest surrounds, embracing
>Yet, the elusive water rushes on.
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>It has a little waterfall that runs
>Underneath the bridge to the other side
>Of the woods, moving on its hurried path.
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>The gleaming sun sneaks through the Pines and shines
>On the rolling ripples of the water
>Making it twilight's own glimmering pool.
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>In Summer the townspeople all drop by
>Couples, children, even dogs take a dip
>In the brisk currents of our busy creek.
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>The visitors come and go in season
>In Winter the creek whispers in silence
>With snow-flocked Firs to witness its passing.
>
>There's a freshwater creek nearby my home
>Here, I notice the rhythm of nature
>I see the creek always slipping away
>And I'm reminded I, too, must move on.
>
>c2002Bonnie B. Hayes

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