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Date Posted: 16:54:57 06/29/02 Sat
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB05a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.167
Subject: Re: Diary � Entry 30
In reply to: SandDollar 's message, "Diary � Entry 30" on 07:11:39 06/27/02 Thu

Welcome to Unicorn SandDollar - and if you are going to grace the Unicorn's glade with this talent, you will be a very valuable contributor.

I didn't comment immediately as I like to read the more complex poems through several times before commenting.

I like the contrasting imagery in this poem

'Heroic and unnoticed,
Lusty and feeble,
Empty and satiated'

and the 'Like Me' also adds an interesting comment.

Would love to know the inspiration behind the poem.

Much enjoyed - hope to read more from you.

Raphaela

>Rushing currents from offshore tides
>Continue surging with iron thrust,
>In timeless depths that live and breathe
>Spurred by surreal majesty,
>Banked, then set adrift,
>...Like me.
>
>Traveling escorts, friend and foe,
>Heroic and invisible,
>Lusty and feeble,
>Empty and satiated,
>Congealed and thrashing,
>Wise and foolish,
>...Like me.
>
>She, the queen, curls a perky smile,
>But her bags are burdensome so
>Her shoulder droops,
>And royal hand no longer waves.
>Brave �do-gooders� lunge for rescue,
>Though she may be out of reach,
>...Like me.
>
>Inquisitive boy, razor mind, struts
>For notice with insatiable cravings,
>No audible voice or sage eyes to reveal
>What he deems validation.
>Misperception hollows him and
>He can�t be heard,
>...Like me.
>
>Bravely buoyant, O great heart,
>Such striking charm he owns
>Revered by all, but himself.
>And he tires treading harsh waters,
>While supporting the world with one hand,
>And wonders at his own chance of being held.
>...Like me.
>
>Like a chaste kitten, she hopes to be
>Fed by springs of fanciful dreams,
>Though considerably na�ve and silly,
>Say masses beaten down
>Errs of an innocent bid social penalty,
>Blighting the remains of a tender heart,
>...Like me.
>
>Fortified mind preserves inner strength,
>A man of reason, who collects quilting pieces,
>Adding to his already bulging sack.
>He toils to regenerate youth�s flash,
>Offering symbiotic links,
>As he strolls a final path,
>...Like me.
>
>Powerful urges grate her being,
>Sensual awakenings and sweaty lust
>Should remain strangers, but she probes.
>Improper replies surface when
>Mass and essence mix, inciting
>Arousal to flush her face
>...Like me.
>
>Father of His universe,
>All must bow to thee!
>Provoke your wayward children,
>Instill only guilt from fears you embrace.
>Never forgiving or forgiven,
>Or trusting or tasting warmth,
>...Like me.
>
>Flow onward mighty current, bearing
>Heroic and unnoticed,
>Lusty and feeble,
>Empty and satiated,
>Congealed and thrashing,
>Wise and foolish,
>...Like me.
>
>As I�m worn by your waves,
>Weary, anguished, torn,
>Wanting homeward shores,
>Praying for a crest to take me there,
>With of an endless sea
>Of significant drifters,
>...Like me.
>
>� SandDollar; June 25, 2002

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Re: Diary � Entry 30 -- SandDollar, 18:29:41 06/30/02 Sun