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Date Posted: 12:51:20 07/06/02 Sat
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB08a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.170
Subject: Re: A While...
In reply to: "Wildflower" 's message, "A While..." on 12:55:16 07/03/02 Wed

Welcome to Unicorn Wildflower.

I really enjoyed reading this poem - your style, the way each stanza cascades into the next, yet builds on the previous. Many readers could identify with the sentiments contained within the poem and could, therefore, relate. I particularly adored the last stanza.

Raphaela

>Today I dreamed his eyes
>and us making love
>in his river- view apartment
>
>the calendar marked
>early June...
>
>on our first date he wore
>black jeans and a shirt
>we went for a drive
>and talked into the night
>
>I liked the smell of his skin
>and the way he held me
>with...
>the kisses he stole
>we thought we'd love forever,
>
>but I needed time
>and he was gone a while
>I understood there were some
>storms in his life.
>
>I was tempted to pick up the phone
>but it kept on ringing
>ring, ring, ring...
>
>someone said:
>they saw him sitting by the water alone.
>
>I watched the late news
>the lightening struck, right
>before the stormy weather
>the river swelled and run to sea
>
>has someone cursed our luck?
>
>I watched from the window
>as a shadowy figure
>pulled into driveway
>
>it must be him???
>
>
>the wind
>turned upside- down the sign
>left by the door
>it read...
>welcome back
>as it again rolled three times over
>it was distinct
>welcome back, welcome back, welcome back...
>
>quiet rains are falling
>one droplet at the time
>washing away the innocence
>of early June.

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