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Date Posted: 23:04:44 07/06/02 Sat
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheM04b.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.194.14
Subject: Re: Lost in a Dream of Satin Sheets
In reply to: Ambrosia 's message, "Lost in a Dream of Satin Sheets" on 20:16:59 07/06/02 Sat

You have an even pace to this poem, and the opening line of each 'Calmly ....' contributes to this. This allows the reader time to fully absorbe the rich imagery in your writing and particularly the metaphors - all of which were much enjoyed.

Welcome to Unicorn Ambrosia, I have enjoyed reading your work recently and look forward to you sharing more of your talent here.

Raphaela



>Calmly it spreads
>Like a flower open to bloom
>First rays of sun light
>In this coldest dark
>
>Calmly I wait
>Ready for the life support
>First kiss grows deep
>This passion over whelming
>
>Calmly we sink
>Like a fallen star does shoot
>The flame consumes
>Lost in a dream of satin sheets-Ambrosia
>
>
>i would like to admit it is not my best of work please
>excuse it-Ambrosia

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