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Subject: JORDAN (ASHENA) READ HERE!!! VRY IMPORTANT

Author:
Niki

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Date Posted: 09:38:51 02/16/06 Thu

You know in our Julie/Stan plot, that part where Julie is about to kill Ash? Ok, I had some changes:

Julie already kinda knows Ash so its gonna be hard for her to kill Ash, and in our plot Julie doesn't know her at all. So, the changes for that chapter:

Instead of Julie attacking Ash this is what's gonna happen:

Julie, Ashena and Carmine are just like hanging round at the warehouse area and Julie knows she has to tell Ash the truth. She like tell her Stan forced her into this deal that if she kills Ash then $5000 dollars in her pocket. She then takes out the knife she was going to kill her with and holds it out to her and she was planning to say "Take it. You need it more than me." but b4 she can say anything Carmine flips it cuz he's high and grabs the knife, grabs her and throws her to the wall, one hand pinning her two hands to the wall, the other holding the knife at her throat. He says something (still have to think what he's gonna say) and somehow it's gonna lead to Julie screaming something like "YES!!!!!!!!!!" and she beats him forward away from her and she collapses onto the ground, sobbing. Ashena looks coldly at Carmine then kneels down in front of Julie. Julie looks at the knife, looks to the side away from Ashena and throws it fiercely. The knife lands smack bang in the middle of an old, long-forgotten darts board. Ash's quite shakin from this whole ordeal, but she keeps her cool and handles it the Ashena Way. She's about to speak when Julie flies up and storms off, punching Carmine hard in the shoulder as she wizzes off.

And that's the new Part Two. I deleted the old "Part Two" cuz it didn't make any scense. We started off excellently but then slightly starting wandering in the wrong direction, so I changed Part Two to fit in more with where we're now.

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Subject	Author	Date
Re: JORDAN (ASHENA) READ HERE!!! VRY IMPORTANT	JJ	15:18:59 02/16/06 Thu
Re: JORDAN (ASHENA) READ HERE!!! VRY IMPORTANT -- Niki, 08:11:17 02/17/06 Fri