"slumberous aquamarine eyes" within the first five pages.
An eager, sensual virgin who seems to know exactly how to proceed.
A virgin described in the same paragraph as having "delicious curves" and as "nymph-like."
I'm sorry - but, unless she has an anime-like unstable form, she can't have both..... can she?
It also had a heroine who asked for a "job" in 1848, but a hero who is apparently unable to think the word *pregnant.* All the expectant women are thought of as 'increasing.' I've read a fair amount of fiction actually published in the 1840s and even earlier - and never seen this particular euphamism before.
I had no idea what the hell s/he meant the first time the phrase showed up.
It is no wonder that fanfic is full of the same purple prose.
