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Date Posted: 07:47:26 05/24/02 Fri
Author: Scott Plumbtree
Subject: Re: Mercy Street
In reply to: martin37 's message, "Mercy Street" on 12:16:52 05/11/02 Sat

This one feels good as far as meter and rhyme. It seems a bit short to me. Also, I'm not sure I understand the point behind the song. What were you shooting for with this one?? It looks to be a great start! It may be that only another chorus needs to be repeated in there thus making it about the right length.

>MERCY STREET
>
>Walking this mercy street
>I didn’t know
>How narrow this would be
>Walking this narrow street
>I think of you
>And understand
>
>I paint the sky
>Blue eyes blue
>And look at you (chorus)
>I paint the sky
>Blue eyes blue
>And point at you
>
>Walking in your light
>Hiding from you
>Hiding from your love
>Walking your way is
>A prayer on this street
>To leave it all behind
>
>Walking on this mercy street
>2 find one another
>And hide in a silent night.
>
>
>
>A lyricist looking for collaboration on
>www.lyricforasong.de
>Critics welcome.
>Martin

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