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Date Posted: 17:25:38 10/28/02 Mon
Author: Jeff Travilla
Subject: If you reveiw this one for me, I'll do one for you...

Well, this one is the lastest song I've written, and I feel that it is the strongest lyric I've done. It's based on an incident that happened with one of my friends here at college. PLEASE.... critique it! And don't just say, "that was good..." Help m e improve it. I can handle criticism!

It's called "Love" but the title is ironic, which you will see...

LOVE
I want to hit you I want to
Like you hit you I want to
I want to tear you I want to
Like she's been torn by you
I want to make you feel fear
Like you made her feel
You are a worthless human
A fool not a fuckin man

CHORUS
Let me feel violent for a moment
Let me lose control
I barely know you
I already hate you
Never touch her again for your sake

I'm starting to see more and more that
You are a worthless, plastic person
You are not worth her tears
You are not worth her pain
It's all a fuckin game to you
I hope you're eternally alone
Never find love
Never find peace
Never find love
Never find...

C HORUS
Let me feel violent for a moment
Let me lose control
I barely know you
I already hate you
Never fucking touch her again for your sake

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