Date Posted:21:56:00 10/28/09 Wed Author:Page Subject: I love it when that happens! >>>> In reply to:
Lady Morilka
's message, "And another crit>>>>" on 09:26:16 10/28/09 Wed
You made my day when you said the excerpt sucked you in so that you had trouble remembering to critique! Thank you so much! *G*
>>Katie shook her head
>>in a mixture of amusement and irritation as she read
>>about NBC’s cutting away from the Jets-Raiders game
>>with only 50 seconds left to air their regularly
>>scheduled programming, which just happened to be a
>>showing of the movie “Heidi.”
>LOL
When I first heard about the Heidi Game, I laughed my butt off! The bad part was, the Jets, who were losing when the network went to Heidi, came back and scored within those 50 seconds, and won the game in the last minute. Irate callers crashed the NBC switchboard three or four times. It lead to a change in American programming, so now a sports broadcast will come to its conclusion before the network airs regularly scheduled broadcasts. A sports nut like Katie would definitely be interesting in that, so I incorporated it into the story.
>>
>>“Good for them,” she muttered under her breath as she
>>read how angry viewers had crashed the NBC switchboard
>>calling to complain. If she’d been in the States, she
>>would have been one of those callers, that’s for sure.
>> In her opinion, if Heidi’s grumpy grandfather
>>couldn’t wait one freaking minute for the ballgame to
>>conclude, then he didn’t deserve to air at all. Coming
>>to the end of a column, she searched through the
>>pages, looking for the continuation of the article as
>>Adam sang something about the look in a woman’s eyes.
>>Abandoning her search for a moment, she glanced up and
>>grimaced.
>I would like to hear more of the noises in the
>flat, we have the scribling on the paper and the
>guitar, surely the later one could interrupt the
>reading som place. I think it should feel cosy and
>warm not to be alone, to hear others but not having to
>deal with them. If that made any sense.
Makes a lot of sense, and I know what you mean. It is a cozy feeling to know you're among other people, to hear them, even if you're not interacting with them. And, too, Katie would be hyper-aware of Jay, so his guitar would surely intrude upon her consciousness. Thanks for that suggestion!
>>
>>“You’re both lying.” Adam glanced up, a hint of
>>irritation on his handsome face. “You’re the two most
>>ticklish people I’ve ever met.” His eyes dropped back
>>to his pad, and he started humming.
>I like the humming here, it underlines what I said
>before.
Thank you!
>>
>>“Oh, good. I never lose.” Katie peered up at him
>>through her lashes, and ran the tip of her tongue
>>suggestively over her lips. As she had intended, Jay
>>was distracted long enough for her to wrench one of
>>her hands loose from his grasp, and apply it to his
>>ribs.
>Oh I love that part, it is so sexy!
>> She does know how to get a man's attention. LOL!
>>
>>“If you two are quite through trashing the flat, I’d
>>really like to take this from the top again.”
>akk, bad timing ;)
Poor, thick Adam. He didn't realize just what he'd interrupted!
>>
>>It had been six days since she’d first met Jay, and
>>five days since she’d kissed him. For almost a week,
>>she’d thought about those kisses, especially the last
>>one, still surprised the floorboards of the entry way
>>of the apartment building weren’t scorched.
>I really like the way you discribe the emoltions
>here, "scorched floorboards" That must have been one
>hell of a kiss. But it doesn't come accross cheese
>that way.
I'm glad to hear that, thank you! (By the way, it was some kiss. *G*)
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