Date Posted:13:07:59 08/16/10 Mon Author: Debi Subject: Thanks, Fi! In reply to:
Fi
's message, "Touching and real >>>" on 09:15:08 08/16/10 Mon
>Wedding scenes run the risk of being stereotypical or
>saccharine, but Valerie's and Daniel's big day out is
>anything but. You've brought out the individuality of
>their characters and the genuine feeling behind their
>vows.
Thank you. I decided to time-lapse it when I was on the verge of writing everything word for word. It didn't need to be.
>
>>Nessa sent Kelly down the
>>aisle with a warning not to run.
>There's so much in this one sentence. Kelly's
>excitement, Nessa's protectiveness.
Kelly is WAY excited, and I'll incorporate more of that as I fill in the previous events.
>
>>Valerie had been
>>surprised to discover he was a notary and he’d been
>>delighted when she asked him to officiate.
>Cyrus is an old friend, I presume? He sounds like
>someone who has been introduced earlier. I love his
>"you may kiss your missus" line.
In the previous story Old Dogs, Cyrus is a friend of the family and a drummer. Every Thanksgiving they have a big get-together and play music. Cyrus brings his 5 gallon bucket to play;-)
>
>>“Thank you for making me laugh again.”
>Doesn't that line say it all?
It does. Having lost his first wife to cancer, he took a long time to grieve.
>
>>“What are we waiting for?” she called. “Let’s party!”
>I bet they're going to boogie the night away!
Stay up and play music all night!
Thanks again for your kind comments. As long as these people stay real, I know I'm doing my job adequately.
Hugs,
Debi
